Do you like this part of my book?? :):):):)?

It gets a tad confusing who is talking in the top paragraph, maybe you could try relating the speech to the characters a bit more, even if it's simply "he said". Also you change tenses from the 2nd paragraph to the last little bit eg "he squeezes" in the 2nd and then "John turned" whereas it should really be John turns". Apart from that + a few minor spelling errors it sounds like it should be a good read!